(8)
The picture imply that love is very important to the needy. Love like a lamp, which is brighter in the darker place. Let’s have an example. when a person, who is around us, has a serious ill and need a sum money to pay for the medical fee but he or his family can’t affort it, we will make our efforts to help him. It is clear that love is important to everyone, in particular, to the needy.
It is well known to all, love is probably the noblest among all the worthy feelings of mankind, but everyone has his/her own understanding of it. As far as I am concerned, I think the best way to show love is our suitable help when others are facing with difficulty and need our helps. If we help others without thinking whether others need, it perhaps decrease other’s confident and at the sametime take us in troubles.
As is know to all, everything has two sides. Show love properly will take effective function, otherwise it will take negative function. As a consequence, We should not only have love but also show it properly.
[给分] (7) 8分；(8) 6分。
[评语] 内容切题，包括题中所列要点；语句尚可理解，但结构与用词错误多；有些是严重错误；长度基本符合要求。
(9)
This picture show that love is a lamp which lead a bright light and hope when one involved in dark. In China, we can see many stories about love, for example. From newspaper we can often read about “The Project hope.” There are many people delvate himself to help others. In remote country, some children can’t go to school because no money. However, in other district, there are many people to provide money to help these children.
From this picture, a small light bright some area. We can read much from it. As a university students, we can do much, do best. We can study hard science knowledge. We should improve our from all kind of aspect. As long as we devote oneself to help those troublesome man.
(10)
The symbolic is a light, it will be more powerful when the circumstances is more dark. Everyone has symbolic and symbolic is a very good matter to us. It come from us and it can help us. The symbolic is not only a feeling, but also is a character.
Mrs Bingxin is a good writer with symbolic. She gave all she can do to the society, include money, book and her heart. She tried her best to help those people who needs help.
We should show our love to the people, furthermore, we should show our love by the best way. I believe we have we have to do is not only the word, but also is the action, not only the money, but also the heart. If all of us have give our symbolic, the world can change more beautiful.
[给分] (9) 4分；(10) 2分。
[评语] 与题意勉强有关，但条理不清，不成篇章；语句错误多且严重；词不达意。
对比阅读：
（学生习作评改）
学生原文：
As is illustrated in the picture that love is a lamp, the darker setting is ,the brighter lamp is. around all the feelings of human beings love is the noblest one, I think of course, everybody has their own understanding for it.
I think that love seems as that give someone a hand in need, perhaps the help is too small to feel hardly, but it neccessary for the people that in difficulties. For instance, when a little girl lose her way just a hand that help her to find her family is the best help. when your friends in trouble probably a word which was filled with heartening will call out his strength or spirit to conquer the difficulties. the help is very small in your eyes, but do not don't give your hand, because it is very useful for them.
In my opinion, we must give a hand to the people who are more unfortunate than us. you can imagine that if everyone give a help to them, the world will become a better place, the future of mankind will be more peaceful, people will live in a fine life. what do you hesitate to do it ?baby. well, let's carry out our "nice plane"!
修改稿：
As is illustrated in the picture that love is a lamp, the darker the setting is, the brighter the lamp is. aroundAmong all the feelings of human beings, love is the noblest one,. I think of course, everybody has their own understanding forof it.
I think that love seems as that is to give someone a hand in need, perhaps the help is too small to feel hardly, but it is neccessary for the people that in difficulties. For instance, when a little girl lose loses her way, just a hand that help helps her to find her family is the best help a precious help for her. When one of your friends are in trouble probably a word which was is filled with heartening love and care will call out his strength or spirit to conquer the difficulties. In these cases, the help is very small in your eyes, but do not don't give hesitate to extend your hand, because it is very useful for them.
In my opinion, we must give a hand to the people who are more unfortunate less fortunate than us. you can imagine that if everyone give gives a help to them, the world will become a better place, the future of mankind will be more peaceful, and people will live in a fine life. what do you hesitate to do it ?baby. well, let's carry out our "nice plane"!
评讲：
文章字数稍嫌不够。内容和结构比较完整，问题主要在语言表达方面。错误的地方已标出，有需删除的，也有需添加的。语法方面，主要是
第一段：冠词，介词。
第二段：主谓一致（单数名词后跟单数动词），时态（普遍发生的状况用一般现在时）。
第三段：主谓一致，形容词比较级。
另外，有的用词也不太准确，文章结尾难以理解。
范文四：
2002
Directions:
Study the following picture carefully and write an essay entitled “Cultures---National and International”
In the essay you should
1. describe the picture and interpret its meaning, and
2. give your comments on the phenomenon.
You should write about 200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET II.
An American girl in traditional Chinese costume
各档次分数段例文：
(1)
This is a very interesting picture of a lovely American girl dressed in traditional Chinese costume with a sweet smile on her face. She wears a pearl necklace, colorful ribbon, ear rings, and other decorating things that are characteristic of the clothes of a Chinese minority nationality. It is obvious that as a result of our open-door policy, more and more foreigners visit China and become interested in our national culture, which is making it go international.
There is no reason to make a fuss about this phenomenon. With the rapid development of technology and economy, the world is becoming smaller and smaller, and international cultural exchanges have become more and more frequent, which is inevitably improving our mutual understanding and friendship with other countries.
As Chinese citizens, we should respect our own national culture and learn useful things from the cultures of different nations, which will enable us to make great progress in many ways. I believe a happy and bright future is awaiting us if we make every effort to promote cultural development both nationally and internationally.
(2)
Nowadays, “national culture or international culture” has become a matter of great concern for the general public in our society, especially for those who are confronted with this problem. Now let’s take a look at the American girl in traditional Chinese costume. She looks very beautiful with a nice smile on her face. It seems that the girl is very fond of the Chinese costume.
Obviously, the picture indicates that a culture of one nation may become international, which is beneficial to all the human beings. Since China has opened its door widely to the outside world, many people from different countries want to visit China. They will accept and love the Chinese culture as a whole. In addition, Chinese culture should be well shared with foreign people who have shown their great interest in it. Meanwhile, the Chinese people are also exposed to foreign cultures when more foreign people come to China. In this way people from various nations in the world will be able to acquire better understanding of each other and live peacefully in this world.
My opinion about this cultural phenomenon is that a national culture should become international. This is because the culture of any nation is a kind of precious heritage, and belongs to the whole mankind.
[给分](17——20分)
(3)
As is shown in this picture, we can see clearly that a charming American girl who is in traditional Chinese costume is smiling to us. The purpose of this picture is that with the development of globalization, great changes have taken place in the world, and one nation’s culture has been accepted by the people from another culture.
why does this phenomenon appear? I think there are several reasons as follows. First, with policy of opening the door to the outside world being well implemented in China, a large number of people from other countries like to visit China and become interested in traditional Chinese culture. Second, due to the easy and fast communications, the distance between various nations has been shortened, and people can get in touch with each other easily. Therefore, cultures from various nations can be exchanged and different cultures can merge together quickly.
In my opinion, people from different countries should learn and share different cultures. Each culture has its own advantages which might be beneficial to another culture. Besides, there is a trend that globalization is going to be accepted in the whole world. Therefore national cultures should gradually become international.
(4)
As the picture shows, an American girl in traditional Chinese costume, with a smile on her face, is presented. Obviously, the girl enjoys the culture of traditional Chinese, as many people do. It indicates that a culture of one country will go to international.
Many advantages can be seen when a national culture becomes international. First, it can show the outside world its native culture. For example, China, as a country with a long history, may share her profound culture with the rest of the world. Other countries may benefit from the traditional Chinese culture in many aspects. Second, it will promote communications and exchanges between different cultures from various countries. From my experience, I was very exciting and astonished when I had a chance to know American culture through the English language. In my college life, I am lucky to have several foreign friends. Ideally, my foreign friends and I have learned a lot from each other about the cultures. Third, it is nice for people from different cultural backgrounds to live together and share the different cultures.
In a word, man’s life will be made more colourful when national cultures have become international.
[给分] (13——16分)
(5)
As seen from the above picture, an American girl in traditional Chinese costume is smiling to us with friendly looking. There are a lot of bright and beautiful accessories on her body. She dresses in Chinese costume, which is a symbol on behalf of the minority people in our country. From the picture we can draw a conclusion that cultures are national and international, and no limit between different countries. Even if growing up in various countries, we have still the same interests in cultures, not only in America, but also other countries.
In my view, it is no exaggeration to say that cultures are the most important factor, which can make the mankind progress and benefit a great deal from the communication in cultures, other than economic development. I am of the opinion that, in reaction to the phenomenon of cultures tending to be national and international, China should hold the key to success in the 21st century both in economy and cultures. We are required by the world people to open our cultures. Only in this situation can China act in cultures as an important role in the world stage. Of course, faced with the entry in foreign cultures, we must take steps to keep up the alertness against bad minds. My argument to the point is that we can’t throw the baby away with the bath water.
(6)
From this picture we can see an American girl who was wearing a Chinese costume. This girl may be a foreign student or a traveller. She seems to like this costume very much. This picture shows a common phenomenon in China even in the whole world. The phenomenon is that the culture becomes international. The phenomenon is not only in China but also in many other countries. Many people begin to go to many different countries and learn different national cultures.
As far as I am concerned, I think this phenomenon is good to us. Firstly, we can learn some good cultures from other countries, and also can make our good culture confront the world. The international trend of culture can promote our cultures proceed. Secondly, the cultures become international, which can make more people know our country. So many people will come to our country to have a jurnal. That can rise our travel economy income. Finally, if the culture becomes international it can contact the people of whole world. That will make the world better.
In a world, the phenomenon of the culture-international can benefit to us. That is a good phenomenon.
[给分] (9——12分)
对比阅读：
（学生习作）
In the picture, a beautiful girl is dressed in traditional Chinese costume. It’s easy to find that she is an American girl, with a sweet smile on her face. From her expression, we can deduce that she may not only like the costume, but also like the Chinese cultures.
This phenomenon shows us a further meaning—cultural exchange and communication. It’s true that there is a variety of cultures in different countries in the world. But in essence, there aren’t obvious bounds in those cultures. Secondly, because of the need of the development in human society, communication plays a more important part now that it did before. The world has become more smeller than it was. Furthermore, when people learn more cultures of other countries, they will be able to avoid international misunderstanding.
In my opinion, we should magnify and expand those kind of cultures the scope of culture exchange may be extended from traditional costume to custom, social life, education and even economy. In addition, it is necessary that government should promulgate some decrees to promote the cultures-national and international. I wait a day that cultures will be mixed together. In future, the word “country” will no longer exist people from different areas will live in a whole family.
范文五：
2003
Directions:
Study the following pictures carefully and write an essay about 200 words based on the following
1. describe the set of drawings and interpret its meaning
2. point out its implications in our life.
各档次分数段例文
(1)
The two picture describe the flower in the warm-room can’t endure the bad invirnmental. It is most likely that the drawer intends not only to tell us the fact but to set us thinking what is under the iceberg.
For the time being. The entrance of WTO has become the hot topic. Different people have different idea about the entrance of WTO, there are advantages and disadvantages. There are some possible reasons why China important reason for this issue. The most important reason is that the development of China can’t leave nation’s economic will stop developing and will not have a chance to take part in the world economic. Another reason for jointing WTO is that the entrance of WTO could be of great benefit to our nation.
